I half wonder if it should not be "as he was in one with her". Maybe the current wording works, but it almost seems to be missing something.
You’re right. Does this sound better?
Lois was clearly as interested in a physical relationship with Clark as he would like to be with her.I think that is a major inprovement.
He could just tell her that if they make love she will die.
He could, but would she believe him?
Well, if he told her enough of his backstory, she might agree to waiting until Herb shows up again. But she would insist that they ask Herb for actual proof then, and then consider whether it is worth accepting. I would say the chances of that, even if Clark breaks all world records in clarity of explantion, would still be under 50%. So, I guess this probably would not work.
