If it succeeded at doing that, the Lex-Clone was allowed to kiss Miss Lane on the cheek as its reward before returning to ark.
I think you want to say "the ark".
Using techniques he learned while in the DMI (Indian’s Military Intelligence),
It should either be "Indian Military Intelligence" or "India's Military Intelligence". I would probably go with the later, since I would probably say "the CIA, America's intelligence".
I have to say I like the added details and background on Asabi.
