First line:
"NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!"

I doubt that's enough to hold back the masses so...

Next para:
The young boy ran down the road, yelling at the top of his lungs. He moved faster than humanly possible, running towards the two people he loved more than anyone else in the world.
Better? smile
Carol [word count: 5042]

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