Good tension. Good characterization for Clark, Perry, and Bill Henderson. Lois is in character too, but so far she's played more of a secondary role. Maybe that will change in the next couple of installments. And yes, you are handling this situation quite ably.
I'm enjoying this one a lot. And I see a Kerth nomination it it's future.
Though I haven't seen it, someone may have already mentioned this to you. The convention (and I stress that it is indeed convention and not a requirement) is to place a blue arrow in front of the story parts so they stand out a bit from other posts. I almost missed chapter 3 because I forgot you hadn't used them before. I'll find the next chapters, though, whether they're marked or not.
