Excellent chapter. I enjoyed reading Henderson's perspective. I'm wondering where Perry dropped off Jack and Jimmy, and if Clark's apartment, did he beat them there. Looking forward to more.
I do have one suggestion. You might consider placing a link to this comments thread at the end of each chapter, since at least for the first two you are posting in separate threads, and the second chapter has no link. That way, if the comments get separated from the story, it's easier for readers to find and leave comments.
Thanks for the suggestion! I have added it to the bottom of the chapter.
