She could tell that Eugene hated the idea that Lena had used him as fall man for the true killer, and wondered why she would ask Lois and Clark to ask him to turn himself in. Seeing no answer other than Lena not wanting the true killer caught, Eugene took his broken heart to sulk in kitchen and left Lois and Clark alone in the living room to say goodnight.
I think that should be "sulk in the kitchen".
“This isn’t about Clark. It’s about finding a connection between his abduction to the other murders,” she said.
I think that should be "abduction and the". Either that or you could replace between with from.
Rita looked like a doe caught by headlights of Lois’s semi-truck. “Not, yet. Dry-cleaning day and all.”
I think since you made the headlights specific and not general it should be "doe caught by the headlights of Lois's".
