For me the formatting was just right. I got breathless just reading it. I don't find the ellipses to be annoying at all.
My 2 cents said..this was amazing.
Clark's invulnerability at the right moment..holy, I was on the edge of my SEAT!
Their struggle through the blizzard, my heart was aching with the pain and disorientation they were feeling that I swear I felt as I read this! Powerful stuff indeed!
And what, or who, is in that cabin??
Glad to hear that you will be posting more often..I'd be happy to give you one more opinion on how it flows as a whole, so you can just email me the completed story asap..(hey I can quote CC too..what if it works??)
~Liz