Feedback! Y'all left me some feedback!
Carol - I think you're definitely going to have to post some Shaken now. Sorry, but there's no getting around it. :p
Ann - Wow! Thank you for replying at length! You were very good to pick up on this:
Poor Clark, he just can't deal with Lois right now... well, not the Lois that he thinks he knows. But the Lois who is waiting for him is different.
Exactly! Flois is much more mellow and supportive. It's not that Plois can't be mellow or supportive (as we saw), but she never had the opportunity before (or even knew that the opportunity existed).
I'm not sure I'd say Lois was like Martha in that part (although I do think that Clark married someone just like his mom). I well remember being about three months pregnant and nauseated to the extreme when my husband picked me up from work late one night. He took me home (stopping once on the way so I could be sick outside the car) and put me in the bath. The feeling was comparable to parent/child, but I never once confused him with my dad (or mom).
What I remember of the incident, and what I was giving Clark, was the simple comfort of having someone you love and trust take care of you.
I love how you paint this world of night and sleep as an otherworldly dimension of soft blue light, cottony snow, whispering sheets and a beloved woman known fully only in dreams, who cradles her loved one in her arms like a mother her child.
Awww, that was poetry, Ann. Thank you!
Pam - LOL - yeah, it does feel weird to type Flark and Plark, but it's so much less confusing that way. I started doing it because that was how alcyone referred to them when she was helping me plot the story out last summer. You're absolutely right - no matter what time they're in, they need each other.
Artemis - I'm glad you're accepting blame so fully.
I took out Lois' POV on the first part because I thought it needed to be more about Clark. Her actions, through his eyes, could speak for her.
sjp - Yes, I had the same worries about cheating/uncomfortable to read. I'm so glad that it's working for you (so far - heh).
GamesAway - New reader! <insert dorky happy dance> Thank you for understanding why I changed the story. Sometimes what seems good in your head when you first sketch it out, doesn't quite work when you actually get to that part of the story.
Jen -
Of course you're moving! That's a power I wield hesitantly, knowing that the simple act of posting can cause you to seek shelter elsewhere.
So where's the crazy roommate/neighbor story to explain what necessitated the move?
bellarata - Yay! You said the magic words:
I don't even care if they don't get back to their 'appropriate' times, <chortles with glee> I was hoping that someone (besides me) would get to that point. I'd even go so far as to argue that, no matter what time they're in, they still are each other's "true" counterpart.
Vicki - First things first - a round of applause for Vicki, y'all. Way back in the day (the summer of 2006) when I was still a newbie on this board and was trying to get my second story de-nfic'd (would you believe spell check doesn't recognize that word?) so I could post it on the regular fic boards, Vicki generously volunteered to help me out. So when she says that she knows how paranoid I am about posting, she's speaking from experience.
It makes me giggle (still, some more) that you're still pondering the cheating angle. Lord knows, I've spent months doing it and I still vacillate over the answer. If they're not actually married (at the same time), then it's sort of cheating. Maybe. <sigh>
Thank you all for commenting. I really do appreciate hearing your thoughts. It was entirely due to some of your comments that I rethought and rewrote this part. So now you have definitive proof of how you've all helped this story.
