Hey CC!
If you wanted it to be a surprise, then I guess you succeeded
And being able to surprise the reader is, IMO, a great quality. It is true that sometimes you move a little too fast (I remember having a little trouble keeping up with the third story in your trilogy, but I tend to associate it with the fact that I'm not a native spekaer)
I understand the logic behind your writing. So I'm guessing I'll get to understand Lois's situation as a read on.
I'm glad the comment was helpful
Cris (dying to get back home so she can read on
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