Okay, I've added four new paragraphs to the end of Part 3. Let me know if they help. I think they bring Lois more into character and I hope they make her ultimate decision (or, in this case, her for-now decision) more believable.
What do you think?
P.S. This kind of back-and-forth is what makes these boards so helpful for us writers. Thanks for taking the story seriously enough to question it.
