This was fantastic. Post both parts now please
It's only 10:40, and a friday nite, I'll stay up please
One little minor thing i was wondering:
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He distrusted her so much that he couldn’t even come to her to tell her his secret after she had thought him dead. Did he not know how she would take his death. <<<Did he truly think that he meant so little to him that she would not be devastated to lose him?>>>
Should that be "Did he truly think that he meant so little to """her""" that she would not be devastated to lose him? ??
Should that the "her" not "him" ? And should there be a ? after the sentence before that.
doublel
(who's typing is so bad tonight, I shouldn't point out anything)
Great job, excellent story
