This is so original! I think it's a wonderful idea, taking Clark's confusion and having him recall bits and pieces of fantasies and daydreams and drawing just the cutest, sweetest, most naively hopeful conclusions from them. I, too, am dying to see how Lois reacts to learning Clark's assumptions. And him believing he's cheating on her. He has no memory of who he is, but he's learning that he was a man who is not as morally sound as he would no doubt like to think he is. And he'll no doubt want to make some kind of change, and become a better husband, right those wrongs, make a fresh start, a new beginning...
I cannot wait to see where you take this.
I love the writing style too. I agree that you capture those feelings of confusion and fear, uncertainty and being lost so well. Especially with lines like this, which are so clear and direct, and (as others have said), just layered with so much more, enveloping so much more in the words...
Yeah, he was fine.
Or he would be, if not for the niggling feeling in the back of his head... he knew he had to be somewhere. Somewhere important. Doing something important. He just... he couldn’t remember what that was or where he was supposed to be.
And right from the beginning, when he realizes he knows what a chair is (someone else had quoted that above), is so poignant, because it shows his frustration. He can remember things that have nothing to do with who he is. Things that occupy the world that he dealt with all the time. But he can't remember his own name!
Now he still has to learn that he's the missing superhero, and I can't wait to see how you'll do that. If you'll do it like on the show w/ his parents, or instead in your own way, which will no doubt be just ingenius!
Oh, and PERFECT title for this!
Eagerly awaiting more!!!
~NICOLE
