I absolutely love your version of this scene. As Mike mentioned, you've combined humor and dramatic tension beautifully. The imagery of flowers, fire and later the chill accompanying the cold Superman woven into Lois's introspection and awareness of her feelings is brilliant. Your detail of the muted colors of her clothes mirroring the brighter colors of Superman's uniform is priceless.
You've painted a wonderful story with your words.
Welcome to posting your first L&C story!