Love the detailed feedback, Deadly Chakram. Just keep in mind that Lois didn't know Superman very well when he left, and when Clark was first developing Superman, he did keep his dialogue a bit stiffer than later on in the show. And I'm delighted that you care so much about the story--t makes writing it worth it all!
True, but Supes never sounded robotic in those early days. I'm giving Lois a pass on not picking up on robotic anti-Supes because of all of the emotions she's got swirling inside of her.
