Originally posted by Irene D.:
I thought this experiment with sentence fragments and short terse statements worked really well for this length of story, but for anything longer, it might not, except in short sections interspersed throughout during moments of tension.
I completely agree
Hence the need for a sequel. I thought it'd be too much of a leap to change style and continue the story. I think the sequel will probably be longer than this one too...
Originally posted by YConnell:
Hey, David. I really enjoyed this, and of course I enjoyed the plot. Clark gets shot? What more could I ask of a story.
I never imagined you'd read it, but I definately was thinking of you when I wrote that
In general, I thought the sparse style worked very effectively - you pack a big punch with those short, stabby sentences. However, I'm not altogether sure it worked over the four sections - getting punched line after line for four sections began to feel a little repetitive. I began to roll with the punches, if you will, so that by the fourth section, I was breezing through it fairly quickly without really noticing the effect.
I *was* worried about that. Quite a lot, actually. It was one of the things I wasn't happy about, over kill... but I think I didn't notice as much because it took so long for me to get the parts out that the previous parts weren't as fresh. There wasn't that constant hammering. It'll definately be something I'll keep a closer eye on in the future
Now. A sequel. You have no idea how much I need this sequel. What do I have to do to get it? Please remember I'm bound by the laws of various countries when answering this question.
I'll have to think about that
I hope everybody realises that the sequel will have to wait - the next story I write will be for the Fundraiser DVD... unless I decided to be lazy and submit the sequel for the Fundraiser
