David, this story is amazing! Well done, and I'm so glad that there will be a sequel.

I thought this experiment with sentence fragments and short terse statements worked really well for this length of story, but for anything longer, it might not, except in short sections interspersed throughout during moments of tension.

Of course, this story was all tension!

Looking forward to the sequel.

Irene

I try to take one day at a time, but sometimes several days attack me at once.