Everyone else had such great feedback, and it's late, so all I'll say is: Very good. Interesting plotlines. I'm already getting a little confused trying to figure out what happened when (although the clear headers with date and time are very helpful.)
Hmm... concussed Lois - did she die then, of her concussion and undiagnosed cerebral bleeding?
I'll definitely have to re-read this one five or six times so I can pick up on all the subtle hints you're strewing around. (and I'm sure I'll miss even more hints.)
