Hey Susan
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I have been looking forward to reading this story (well, definitely since you told me about it) but especially since I saw it post later last week. Busy weekends, argh!
Anyway, today, finally, this was totally worth the wait
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First off, I really like that you gave Cat a goodbye. The character needed that, us--we all needed that, too. It was so frustrating how much retooling happened after the first season, and a story like this really gives a lot of closure.
Your take on Cat was spot-on, IMO, dialogue included
. There seemed to be so much more going on with her, a very sensitive person trying to put on a disguise for others and keep them away. I really admire how you expanded on such a great character
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And I
LOVE that it is Lois that Cat wants to say goodbye to. They really have so much in common, don't they? I was really impressed by how you connected them together in the story by their 'acts' that they put on outwardly to others, and then how you let them bond together because of that insecurity. Neither of them has had anyone to relate to, really, and experiencing that commonness with each other, I'm sure, will create a friendship into the future.
Oh--and knowing me, I was very drawn in to Cat's understanding of Lois' true feelings towards Clark. Cat gets it: how amazing of a connection they have, how rare that connection is, and how valuable and lucky Lois is to have that right there in front of her. Yeah Cat for trying to help her friend see that
! Cat has such a clear understanding of Lois' heart, and because of that, I can totally see her being pretty envious of what Lois and Clark could have. Cat feeling so alone--as Lois does--and not having a 'Clark'? Sad
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Cat smiled. “We both have our specialties. We just write about different things. People pick up the paper to read about your scandals, but they stay to read about mine.”
So true! Love this
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“So start speaking. Talk to him – really talk. Don’t let days and weeks go by. Don’t let time cement you where you are now. Use this vulnerable place you’re in as a starting point, a chance to start again. Be honest about who you are and what you want, and hope that he’ll do the same.”
Lois sucked in a breath. “That’s such a gamble.”
“You’ve already lost. So what else do you have to lose?”
Cat-is-awesome! How great is this? She is so perfect with her reasoning. I especially really like the last line
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Cat scoffed. “I don’t have anything that matters. I don’t have a lot of friends.” She caught the look in Lois’ eye and frowned. “I’m sure it seems like I do. I’m at the center of the Metropolis social scene. I’ve gotten the phone numbers of half the men in the city, and I could get a date faster than you could hail a cab. But…” Cat hesitated, because the truth she tried to hide constricted her throat.
“Rub it in, why don’t ya?” Lois muttered.
“I’d trade it all for what you have with Clark.” Cat said it plainly, quietly, without a trace of her typical flirtatious innuendo. “A real connection. A deep and meaningful bond that goes beyond surface attraction or casual interaction. A true friendship that will stand the test of time.”
Perfection. Such gripping honesty. Great writing, Susan
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Cat shrugged. “Maybe just a realist. I’ve seen enough of the transient to recognize the true. If I’ve ever felt any jealousy towards you, it’s because you’ve found something I never have.” Cat gave a rueful smile. “Don’t let it go.”
Powerfully sums up everything between Cat and Lois the first season. So great!
Lois smiled. “The plane goes both ways.”
Big impact sentence! Love it
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Wonderful job, Susan
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Laura (who really wishes this scene could have taken place in the series--it was so easy to visualize while reading, it would have been awesome seeing it acted out
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