I just started on your story and read all five parts in one go before turning in for the night. It was a very enjoyable read, and I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.
I especially like how you manage to show what your characters are feeling without turning your story into endless introspection. The idea of having Clark write about his problem in the form of fiction is inspired. Sure it's going to turn into a best seller eventually, isn't it?
I also like how you mix your A- and B-plots.
