You should retire every day, Tank. Gives you lots of time to produce fic for us to read.
Nice angle with Lucy being far more observant than her sister, who's supposed to be the observant one in the family.
There's only one thing I would have liked better. It would have been terribly amusing to actually watch the whole fight from Lucy's perspective, rather than told through her after-the-fact introspection. Maybe an epilogue might be in order? And no, I'm not writing it this time.
Keep writing, Tank. We need you to hold up the guys' end of the fic-writing (so the rest of us can retire
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