Hi Nan! So glad to see you back and excited for another entry into the Dagger series!!
My thoughts reading this first section are in agreement with the other comments so far. I'd love a little reminder of all the characters and where we are in the story. The series is now on my 'to re-read really soon list', but right now I'm kinda lost about who all the kids are, where they came from, etc.
The biggest thing I noticed is that the way you're referencing characters is kinda odd, and I found it a little difficult to follow. Maybe if you solidify your point of view, that would clear up? There's a lot of 'his mom, his grandpa, that person over there,' especially in the first section and I was wondering why names weren't being used. For a while I was even starting to think Clark was *gone*, as in dead or something, just because of how the focus was on CJ. Glad that's not true!
There's also a little disconnect in the first section. One instant CJ is getting his costume done and Martha is promising to make him more, and the next instant the exact same situation is happening to Marta.
In the second section the viewpoint was more solidified, but it was weird for Eddie's viewpoint to be referring to his mom by her name. Unless he actually thinks of her as 'Sally' instead of 'Mom'?
On the whole though, nice draft! The characters come across nicely and the scene is set for what looks like an interesting time!
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