Ok, so I'm new to the boards, and just stumbled on your story. Really excellent work! I just read it start to finish, you had me on the edge of my seat! I even laughed aloud in appropriate moments and felt all the angst! I love the idea of them being distracted by yumminess on each other's lips, too. I have only one little nitpick... I speak French, and there's no 'e' at the end of pain au chocolat

itty, bitty, tiny, nitpick. But great, great story!!!