Hey, Straw-Author, What makes you think you can write? Your characters are flatter than Wanda Detroit. I'd say that they were "more two-dimensional" than Wanda, but that would give your characters credit for at least one more dimension than they actually possess. You make Lois Lane look like Shakespeare. Your story is even worse than
the First Fanfic of Lois Lane -- and that takes some doing. You do realize that a bunch of random incidents strung together does not constitute a plot? Also, trying to use all possible (and some impossible) points of view in a single story is not something to aspire to.
In fairness, I will say that your story does excel in one area -- it is perfect fodder for an English teacher to show a class what not to do.
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p.s., Queenie, I *love* this idea!
