Yes, this is an amazing story, I enjoyed it immensely. Good job, Ann! Hope your creative juices will keep flowing.
I like Nan's suggestion how to portray Perry's mood. I also missed the Sandman's influence when I initially read this part. You've explained it beautifully, Ann, but it should be included in the story. It's like the Amazon's cut off breast: if you don't elaborate, your readers won't have a clue!
I'm looking forward to see the edited version in the archives.
Ursie
