Hey, Betsy -- I'm excited to see that you've rewritten this, and I'm looking forward to reading it, but it's already about an hour past my bedtime so I think it's gonna have to wait til tomorrow... and I hope to give feedback tomorrow.
PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed. He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement." "You can say that again," she told him. "I have a...." "Oh, shut up."
so I think it's gonna have to wait til tomorrow... and I hope to give feedback tomorrow. 
