I, for one, feel that the burden of un-betaed Sue stories is one that we may all suffer to bear.
Then again, I guess that all depends on your definition of suffer.
This is one of those short stories that is perfect in its length and scope. That is not an easy thing to accomplish!
The real trouble with your stories, Sue, is that the only thing better than a new story is more new stories! It's a vicious cycle.
As far as actual feedback goes...The imagery in this story was fantastic. You have an amazing knack for getting in the characters' heads. These "everyday life" scenes are some of my favorite stories.
Amber
