I loved it! The additional banter was great - the sense that they already have such an easy friendship that they can easily fall into a pattern of joking with each other. clap

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The laughter suddenly died. She straightened up, removing her hands from her stomach. Clark leaned a little closer.

"Lois," he whispered.

Another memory … hundreds of snippets of memory … told her what was coming next. Panic mode set in. "Don't," she whispered in terror, her eyes wide.

Clark stared back at her, frozen. After a wait, that was both too short and too long, he pulled away and turned to start collecting the takeout containers.
I absolutely felt this moment when I read it - it was very well written. The second that seems frozen in time, and then the reality that breaks it...so good! thumbsup


You can find my stories as Groobie on the nfic archives and Susan Young on the gfic archives. In other words, you know me as Groobie. wink