I also am glad everything is working out on the RL front with your daughter.
I really liked the story as far as you took it and of course as it stands we can finish it ourselves the way we would like. Having read it three times now i think you got Lois perfectly. She wants to be mad; she wants to have him (Clark) but is afraid of what that could mean (Superman) and whether she could handle it; she also is in awe that he would latch onto her of all of the people in the world to be his best friend; she loves him (especially the Clark him) but hates what he has done to her. The thing that Clark (and us honestly) loves about Lois is her complexity and her passion both of which are evident in this piece in spades.
I kind of agree with Virginia, a sequel would be nice. On one hand I would prefer one that resolves the mental crisis that Lois is having and on the other hand like the way it is left open. A prequel (Clark's introspective view as you mentioned) would be very interesting from the other side of the coin. But as Virginia said, if it doesn't happen then we have a nice little introspective piece here.
Thanks and great job.
Mike