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#40461 03/15/07 02:20 PM
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Hi Cat,
I guess your plan worked. More than the half story I was thinking it was Lois. But then

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“C’mon, Honey. Come back, now.”
Honey? This is the second season and Clark/Superman didn't say this to Lois when he freezed her...

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“That’s it, Baby. Fight it. Breathe for me.”
That's definitely another person. But who?

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“Cl-“ Her voice was weak and hoarse, and her mouth was too weak to work out whatever word it had been trying to say.
Clark? No, that couldn't be Clark.

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“Miss Parker, may I introduce to you Mr. Clyde Barrow.”
ahhhh, rotflol

Hope you are going on with that story!
Barb

#40462 03/15/07 03:08 PM
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That was great! Completely unexpected and very well written!

Lisa smile


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#40463 03/16/07 03:13 AM
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I was totally fooled until the last few paragraphs!

Great job!


"You take turns, advise and protect one another, even heal or be healed when the going gets too tough. I know! That's not a game--that's friendship!" ~Shelly Mezzanoble, Confessions of a Part-Time Sorceress: A Girl's Guide to the Dungeons & Dragons Game

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#40464 03/16/07 08:12 AM
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Haha, you got me too. Well done!

Jackie


Superman: I hear you've been looking for me.
Lois: All my life.
#40465 03/17/07 07:43 AM
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It took me even longer to figure it out! LOL

Because of the "Cl..." I was still thinking it was Lois in Ms. Parker's body. laugh

Wonderful, I too would like to see more,
Natascha

#40466 03/17/07 04:59 PM
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Lol, you got me too. I still thought it was Lois until the last sentence. I even thought the honey and especially the "that's a girl" was odd for Clark to say, here I was being completely gullible. blush Hehe. But really good job! Comic aspect of fooling me completely aside, I loved the description you used. Worked perfectly.

Laura


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#40467 03/21/07 04:28 PM
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You had me fooled too! I was a little confused by the 'baby' and 'honey'. The killer was when she said "Cl"...of course I thought Clark, but man that was cleaver as she was really trying to say Clyde. Very awesome.

Your descriptions/writing of emotions made it feel real and on the mark. What a sensory overload that was for Bonnie.

WOW!


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#40468 08/28/07 03:52 PM
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Even without the obvious humor, the descriptions you write are vivid and poignant. Her fear and confusion are captivating, as are her desire for breath and support.

Well done, Catherine.

Elisabeth


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