Hi Sara!
Summary: [pending...but something, something about a revelation]
Say, you’re not expecting us to fill those placeholders, right? Right? …Right?
Again! And he’d said he’d needed to [insert Lame Excuse (tm) here]! She couldn’t believe it!
Fine. But not on the first read.
She’d found nothing to indicate what Clark’s secret was, and that only served to make her more upset with him
What do you expect? She didn’t win.
and now she was hunting for food.
There should be enough. Only none of it is edible [either not cooked or made of fructose and corn syrup]
Ingredients, nothing pre-assembled. The man couldn’t even bother to have a frozen pizza or Lean Cuisine on hand?
See?
“I...I, uh...needed to use [insert stutter here to show he’s catching himself before he says something like ‘my shower’] Clark’s shower...”
[…always shower before sleep in this bed…]
She tiltedShe tilted her head [think of a better action here to convey her emotions]
“…threw a handily available fertility statue at the gallivanting superhero…”
[quote]His shoulders slumped and [insert words here that really bring home the ‘anguished face’ vibe],
The statue snapped apart, revealing a sickly green glow just as Superman fell to the ground like a felled tree.
But he totally needs a hug even though his suit is dirty from [[insert generic rescue/disaster]], so she gives him a big, fierce hug.]
His suit looked and smelled like he just got home from cleaning out the Augean Stables.
[[spend forever in thesaurus for right emotion words]] and dangit, now there needs to be a new last line.] The End
That was a [funny…find better word…] story. And yes, I’m with you on the process. Most of the sentence/paragraph has to be right during the “first” try and boy, when there’s a grammar question…weee….there goes the afternoon
Michael