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Hi, Great part.  More ASAP, please. MAF 
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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The way I figure it, Clark's sunburn should help him get his powers back quicker, right??
That was a very sweet chapter, Nan!
Chris
"Together we are stronger than each of us is apart"
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 Very sweet. I, of course, have no objection to having the rest of the story in the Rockies with nothing but lovey-dovey stuff.  Jen Tireless defender of O-okay, I Guess We Can Have An A-plot As Well...
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 I still think there was Kryptonite in the plane, which may mean that someone knows Clark's secret, but I'm happily along for the ride and will wait for you to reveal all. More!! Wendy 
Just a fly-by! *waves*
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Great conversation between L&C! Loved Lois confidence that Superman is coming back! She admired the effect of the tight jeans on Clark, but didn't comment. Despite the fact that he had flown around in a skin-tight outfit as Superman, her partner was surprisingly bashful about certain things. Ingra
Clark: What is that?
Lois: It's my word.
Clark: There is no such word.
Lois: Sure there is. Someone's a chump, therefore, he's chumpy.
Clark: Try again.
Lois: Are you challenging me?
Clark: You bet your sweet little chumpy I am.
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Keep this pace with the two stories, Nan! Jose 
"Practice up your shielding spells...and remember to duck if you see green light coming your way." Harry Potter to Wizengamot in OotP trial A Bad Week in the Wizengamot
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Yay, a romantic night together... huddled on the cold ground with bugs crawling over them But those last 4-5 lines were beautiful. Here's hoping they can cuddle together somewhere more comfortable, tomorrow night...  PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
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Oh Nan, that was so sweet.  More please. gerry
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"Do you still want me?" she whispered.
"More than anything."
"I love you, Clark."
"I love you too," he said. "I have from the beginning, and I always will." Awwwwwwwwwwwwww... ~Liz (<== big puddle of Waffy goo)
Lois: Can I go?
Clark: No.
Lois: Oh come on, Clark, why do we go through this? We both know I’m going to go.
Clark: Then why do you ask?
Lois: I’m trying to be nice.
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I still think there was Kryptonite in the plane. Nah, I don't think so. Otherwise how could he spend a whole night in the cockpit and wake up feeling better than the previous day? And where was the intense pain that usually accompanies kryptonite exposure? Anyway, good stuff, Nan. As you said in another thread, you made excellent use of their long walk to advance the B plot. All the time, Lois is understanding more and more about Clark, and this can only be a very good thing. Sweet ending, too. Yvonne
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Another good instalment. Nice waffy scenes between Lois and Clark.
I am concerned about the 'illness'. If Clark just gets better as they go along, it kind of makes the whole rigamarole they went through over it rather trivial and pointless. We need to find out exactly what the mystery illness was and why Clark had it. Even if it was only the flu and his reaction was so severe because it was his first exposure. The fact that you brought it up in the first place means that it has to have some significance... right?
Tank (who thinks that Nan is amazing for keeping up with two long form fics at the same time)
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Nan- I've enjoyed Twins alot so far, but I'm really glad you got distracted (inspired) and started writing this one, too. Wow. LaurieD
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Nan This is beautifully written.  Tricia
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If Clark just gets better as they go along, it kind of makes the whole rigamarole they went through over it rather trivial and pointless. Well, it was a pretty useful plot device. Personally, I'd be happy to accept the fact that it happened and we're now seeing the consequences. Yvonne
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Well, the only thing I can say about that is that it's connected to the reason his powers haven't come back, and won't for a while, so I guess you could say that it's important to the story. I've always thought that Clark's powers being gone for extended periods without a good reason was kind of stretching things, so I wanted to supply one.
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