Hey, jkd, welcome to the boards and congratulations on posting your first story part! Sometimes that's the hardest thing to do.

This looks like a fun little fic. smile You're right, there are a number of grammar errors, but a good beta reader could help you straighten those out. You may want to post something to the "Fanfic Related" section, asking for someone to help you with this. If you have an idea of how long this might get and where you want to take the story, that'd probably help you get the person who can help you the most.

Story-wise, it's a bit early to tell what you're doing with this, but there are lots of possibilities about Lois & Clark meeting as teenagers. The word-picture you drew of Lois's home life was very poignant. And the idea that she was so deep in thought she didn't realize she was staring at naked people was pretty funny goofy

Keep working on this one! smile It's got potential.

PJ

"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."

--Stardust, Caroline K