Hey, jkd, welcome to the boards and congratulations on posting your first story part! Sometimes that's the hardest thing to do.

This looks like a fun little fic. You're right, there are a number of grammar errors, but a good beta reader could help you straighten those out. You may want to post something to the "Fanfic Related" section, asking for someone to help you with this. If you have an idea of how long this might get and where you want to take the story, that'd probably help you get the person who can help you the most.

Story-wise, it's a bit early to tell what you're doing with this, but there are lots of possibilities about Lois & Clark meeting as teenagers. The word-picture you drew of Lois's home life was very poignant. And the idea that she was so deep in thought she didn't realize she was staring at naked people was pretty funny

Keep working on this one! It's got potential.

PJ

Hi,

Cute start.

Thanks

yep, i know, maybe i shall change their names? I just decided to throw some names, could not think any up
Anyone have any ideas on how it could be continued? I am alittle stuck....

Aha - what you need, jkd, is a beta reader. Someone who will work on the story with you bit by bit, bounce around a few ideas, brainstorm out any plot glitches, listen to your suggestions...and make a few of their own...

Luckily, you've come to the right place. <g> If you post an ad for a beta in Fanfic Related I'm sure you won't have any trouble getting a volunteer or two.

On the story: This is an interesting start and I'll look forward to seeing where you eventually take this one from here.

Whatever you do with it - just keep on writing and having fun with it.

LabRat

Lana and Lois friends?

However, interesting premise

Jose

just keep drowning
good start
I'm looking forward to see where you take us
keep writing
merry