Very nice! Excellent rewrite from Clark's point of view. You did a great job getting into his head and showing us his hopes and fears. Like Ann, I almost wish he'd shared that last secret with her, but maybe you could give us a sequel - say, in a week's time - where he meets her at his place for dinner and a movie and a revelation.

In fact, now I'm looking forward to it. So when are you posting?


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- Stephen King, from On Writing