I think this story is amazing, Shayne.
Every chapter always leaves me thinking that, wow, you've really turned on the afterburners. But then the next chapter lights a new fuse.
Not only do I love the story, I simply love the way you write. These glimpses of our world synthesized through Clark's super senses are fantastic. The part about each city having its own distinctive sound, almost like music, that was beautiful. And then you build on that by contrasting Clark's world with ours by describing how the cities' music differs. And then you describe how he realizes something is wrong by how the shape of all this sound changes. Beautiful!
And Clark going into action to rescue the downed boat ... talk about a situation ripped from the headlines.
Eagerly awaiting Part 16,
Lauren
