I'm so very glad you posted. I thought it was a very well-written story, particularly for someone who spoke English as a second language. (Although it did take me a long time to figure out that Lois was hiding behind a tree in the opening scene and not the number that comes after two.)
By the way, if you ever want a beta reader, just ask somebody. There's a a list of volunteers on the other forum. (Or I'm almost always available.)
I enjoyed the thought patterns. Lois thinks about caffeine and sugar, because she isn't ready yet to think about the deeper things in life.
I thought you picked the perfect place to end your story. We get just a little bit of reaction from Lois and Clark, but nothing from Lex.
Elisabeth
