This is exactly what I was talking about when I asked for constructive criticism. I'll take it all into account when I edit the story for the Archive. I appreciate all of your comments, believe me.
Thanks to all of you who replied.
All of the kids are accounted for (except Eddie) in the previous stories. I'll try to make a list, but if you look they're all there. Linda is Linda Lennox, the first of the half-Kryptonian kids to appear, Nor's daughter and CJ's soulmate. Wyatt is CJ's best friend from school, a normal human boy who learned to talk on the telepathic channel, because he turned out to be Marta's soul mate. Valerie Henderson is one of the superkids, Jen Mai's daughter and the child of Henderson's wife. Ally (Allynda Myers) and her twin brother, Ben are also superkids, Nor's children. Alex is the special project of Arianna Carlin, half Superman's, half Lex Luthor's DNA, adopted by Henderson after CJ and Wyatt saved him from being killed when she thought he was not going to develop super powers. Jonny, Jimmy and the triplets are all CJ and Marta's younger siblings. If you want more details, you'll have to get them from the previous stories.<g>. Just my shameless plug to get you to read the series. I plan on going back and re-doing Dagger's Edge because somehow when it got posted to the Archive it came out badly and needs to be fixed. I'll get to that after I'm done with this one.
And yes, Eddie does refer to Sally as Sally. Just a thing with them. I once knew a family that did just that, and I decided to adopt it for this story. I'll be going back and adding Clark and Lois into other parts later where I need them, after I get the story completely written as a rough draft. As I said, this is my first attempt at writing after several years, and my old technique, getting comments such as those above worked very well before. They help tremendously. You have no idea.
Nan
Last edited by Nan; 09/28/26 02:23 PM.
