Just a remark that I do agree with Sheilah's point here:
Unfortunately for me, you're keeping most of that off-stage and only revealing it in introspection after the fact. I don't prefer that method of telling instead of showing because it distances me to hear about it later rather than experience it as it occurs. But I realize that is a personal preference.
OTOH, I've been so fascinated with the twists and turns and uniqueness of the plot that it has slipped in importance to me. It was the same with your "When The World Finds Out."
Artemis
Can't wait til Thursday.
