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Well, I just read all three parts. I'm not sure I understand. Is Clark dead?


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Oh, another chapter!
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But he had done just that, installed a security system without testing it, without even thinking to test it. That was just not him. Inexplicable.
Huh. Did his security system take out Clark?

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"How long did it take you to get that spit-curl just right - an hour?!" Bruce had asked in a mocking tone.
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"Yeah right. And it's an accident it matches the 'S' on your chest?! Don't they call that, what is the word - ah yes, coordinating your outfit.
CLARK: I’m innocent. I swear!

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If you ever tire of playing superhero, I'm sure a big future awaits you in the fashion industry!" Bruce half-mockingly, half-teasingly replied.
Not with those primary colors in his outfit.

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Guess you need all the help you can get to pick up chicks." Bruce said with a smirk.

"Pick up chicks? Do you mean pick up women - as in a rescue - and yes it does, men too.
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Originally posted by Darth Michael:
Oh, another chapter!
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But he had done just that, installed a security system without testing it, without even thinking to test it. That was just not him. Inexplicable.
Huh. Did his security system take out Clark?

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"How long did it take you to get that spit-curl just right - an hour?!" Bruce had asked in a mocking tone.
laugh

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"Yeah right. And it's an accident it matches the 'S' on your chest?! Don't they call that, what is the word - ah yes, coordinating your outfit.
CLARK: I’m innocent. I swear!

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If you ever tire of playing superhero, I'm sure a big future awaits you in the fashion industry!" Bruce half-mockingly, half-teasingly replied.
Not with those primary colors in his outfit.

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Guess you need all the help you can get to pick up chicks." Bruce said with a smirk.

"Pick up chicks? Do you mean pick up women - as in a rescue - and yes it does, men too.
wave Michael
Thanks for reading and commenting Michael! Being a dark-fic this tale isn't getting too much play here. But that is cool. I'm posting it at fan-fiction and have had a tremendous response there. smile

Originally it was going to be just the first chapter then due to requests it has grown to 3 chapters.

Now I was going to end it here largely because I am going to be away on an assignment for work through much of the summer. But I have promised a few PM'ers at fan-fiction I will complete the story after that. So it will be a big gap but eventually it will get done. Possibly 6 more chapters as I have it mapped out. This is my first fic ever so it's hard for me to judge things precisely. I find the story tends to grow.

I have a hard time with dialog but had what I thought were some good lines in Bruce's Guilt and you seemed to like them. That'll encourage me to do more dialog. blush

It's almost too easy with the skin-tight, nothing left to the imagination Superman suit. It's like he's looking to attract women (get a date) or a certain subset of men. laugh

The lines just flowed from the absurdity of the Superman suit. Made moreso as Marvel heroes and some DC heroes are moving to looser non-form fitting suits. So yeah, what is Supe's problem! notworthy

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I'm posting it at fan-fiction and have had a tremendous response there.
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