FDK: I Didn't Know (3/3: Bruce's Guilt) - 03/31/13 02:07 PM
As always, comments appreciated. Good or bad. 
Re: FDK: I Didn't Know (3/3: Bruce's Guilt) - 04/07/13 03:00 AM
Well, I just read all three parts. I'm not sure I understand. Is Clark dead?
Re: FDK: I Didn't Know (3/3: Bruce's Guilt) - 04/21/13 03:45 AM
Oh, another chapter!
Huh. Did his security system take out Clark?
CLARK: I’m innocent. I swear!
Not with those primary colors in his outfit.
Michael
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But he had done just that, installed a security system without testing it, without even thinking to test it. That was just not him. Inexplicable.
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"How long did it take you to get that spit-curl just right - an hour?!" Bruce had asked in a mocking tone.
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"Yeah right. And it's an accident it matches the 'S' on your chest?! Don't they call that, what is the word - ah yes, coordinating your outfit.
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If you ever tire of playing superhero, I'm sure a big future awaits you in the fashion industry!" Bruce half-mockingly, half-teasingly replied.
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Guess you need all the help you can get to pick up chicks." Bruce said with a smirk.
"Pick up chicks? Do you mean pick up women - as in a rescue - and yes it does, men too.
"Pick up chicks? Do you mean pick up women - as in a rescue - and yes it does, men too.
Michael
Re: FDK: I Didn't Know (3/3: Bruce's Guilt) - 04/21/13 01:06 PM
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Originally posted by Darth Michael:
Oh, another chapter!
Huh. Did his security system take out Clark?
CLARK: I’m innocent. I swear!
Not with those primary colors in his outfit.
Michael
Oh, another chapter!
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But he had done just that, installed a security system without testing it, without even thinking to test it. That was just not him. Inexplicable.
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"How long did it take you to get that spit-curl just right - an hour?!" Bruce had asked in a mocking tone.
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"Yeah right. And it's an accident it matches the 'S' on your chest?! Don't they call that, what is the word - ah yes, coordinating your outfit.
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If you ever tire of playing superhero, I'm sure a big future awaits you in the fashion industry!" Bruce half-mockingly, half-teasingly replied.
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Guess you need all the help you can get to pick up chicks." Bruce said with a smirk.
"Pick up chicks? Do you mean pick up women - as in a rescue - and yes it does, men too.
"Pick up chicks? Do you mean pick up women - as in a rescue - and yes it does, men too.
Michael 
Originally it was going to be just the first chapter then due to requests it has grown to 3 chapters.
Now I was going to end it here largely because I am going to be away on an assignment for work through much of the summer. But I have promised a few PM'ers at fan-fiction I will complete the story after that. So it will be a big gap but eventually it will get done. Possibly 6 more chapters as I have it mapped out. This is my first fic ever so it's hard for me to judge things precisely. I find the story tends to grow.
I have a hard time with dialog but had what I thought were some good lines in Bruce's Guilt and you seemed to like them. That'll encourage me to do more dialog.
It's almost too easy with the skin-tight, nothing left to the imagination Superman suit. It's like he's looking to attract women (get a date) or a certain subset of men.
The lines just flowed from the absurdity of the Superman suit. Made moreso as Marvel heroes and some DC heroes are moving to looser non-form fitting suits. So yeah, what is Supe's problem!
Re: FDK: I Didn't Know (3/3: Bruce's Guilt) - 05/12/13 12:38 PM
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I'm posting it at fan-fiction and have had a tremendous response there.
Michael