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wow!!  This is impressive!! 
"Practice up your shielding spells...and remember to duck if you see green light coming your way." Harry Potter to Wizengamot in OotP trial A Bad Week in the Wizengamot
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Wow. I love the story. Very good, very very very good! Keep it coming, please?
Imagine.
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Hi, Great part. 
Maria D. Ferdez.
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
MAF
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Pulitzer
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Wow poor Clark! I really like George though<g> Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
Caroline's "Stardust"
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Columnist
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Yvonne, this part was very well written.
I don't know very much about substance addiction, but I know what it's like to go on a diet and have that "other" person have a piece of cake or chocolate bar. I know what the arguments in my head feel like and how I feel afterwards. So what Clark is going through, his withdrawal from red kryptonite, seems very real.
Having been a folc for many years, I also understand how badly each Clark needs his own Lois, so once again, the depth of the hole in his life without his own Lois also seems very real.
So now, you have to get Clark to talk to George and admit how he feels about Lois.
gerry
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Wow.
I was supposed to be getting to sleep early, but I noticed a part 2 of an Yvonne fic. Part 2? When did I miss part 1?!
I just read parts 1 and 2. And all I can say is wow. This is so amazingly believable, it hurts.
/me starts counting down the hours till part 3 will be posted
Do you know the most surprising thing about divorce? It doesn't actually kill you, like a bullet to the heart or a head-on car wreck. It should. When someone you've promised to cherish till death do you part says, "I never loved you," it should kill you instantly.
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Hack from Nowheresville
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Yvonne,
Another wonderful part. I really feel for Clark. He's trying, but... And the part with the green kryptonite was wrenching! Hurry with part three!
Jana
"Don't you people have lives?!?" ~Joe on Wings
"An eternal, burning flame. Hope lives on and love remains." ~from Love Remains, by Collin Raye
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Merriwether
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Hey, this is going to be a lot shorter than I originally thought.
A good moral play about the evils of addiction. Clark's death from the green kryptonite will prove to be the tragic example that might save someone else from a life of dependancy.
Tank (who thinks it would be 'interesting' if right after Clark's death Lois shows up weighing about 400 lbs because of her addiction to... chocolate)
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Top Banana
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LOL! Interesting, Tank, but surely to complete the picture we'd need a change of hairstyle. How about waist-length auburn curls? I see people are beginning to clamour for Lois. I guess that idea I had about sending definitive evidence of her death to Perry so he could tell Clark just isn't going to fly, then?  Gerry, that's pretty much how I imagined the addictive mind-set - thought about me and the chocolate biscuit tin and multiplied those feelings up a few thousand times. Otherwise, I guess the mini cliff-hanger sort of worked. Thanks for the encouragement, and Part 3 will be up soon.  Yvonne
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