I'm glad that yall seem to be enjoying this so far! I know I'm having fun writing it.
Originally posted by Framework4:
Interesting start. It seems like you have at least three timelines running?
May I suggest instead of you could use something like [Timeline1 1996] and [Timeline2 1995] and [Timeline3 year?] There's only two timelines running at the moment. I don't think I'll do any more than that. I can hardly keep up with what I've got! As for the 'Timeline 1' etc, I wanted to do something that I haven't seen many people do. If it gets too confusing in later parts, I'll probably come up with something better, though.
Originally posted by TOC:
Wow, this is an absolutely fascinating beginning. Just one of these mystery situations would be a great premise for a story. You have got two of them and are going to interweave them, I suppose. That's definitely like getting two stories for the price of one!
I take it that the scary Metropolis that you placed Lois in is set in a universe haunted by the dark influence of a non-Clark Kent Superman. Let me guess that this Superman might be an unhappy, bitter sort of person, maybe like Batman, but equipped with superpowers to enforce his will on the world and shape it according to his moody wishes. Can Lois make this Superman fall in love with her? Well, duh. Every Lois can do that to Superman. But can she make him change his ways? Can she make him happy and hopeful? Can she turn him into a force for good? Now that is going to be absolutely fascinating to watch.
As for Clark's universe, I was particularly moved by the way you wrote his dream of Lois. It was totally romantic and beautiful, totally heartwarming and totally chilling at the same time.
Please come back with more soon!!!
Ann Awesome! I'm glad the beginning snagged you up like that. You're correct for the most part, but 'There's Kalel isn't operating on his own. He was raised by someone, and is more a puppet than anything else. I'm hoping that Lois will be able to make him happy, or at least make him realize that he
can be happy.
And yes! Those were the reactions I was hoping the dream would cause. ^_^
Blah, quoting and unquoting hurts my head...
LaraMoon: You've opened a can of worms, girly! Soon you'll be regretting you said that, bwahaha! (Er, hopefully not...) But yes, thankyous already! You said you would, afterall.
Phew! I was kind of worried about the fishtank part. I don't know, it just didn't seem to write itself out very well... but I'm glad it did!
Psychofurball: Yes, I posted! Bwaha! Sadly, I don't have much more written, yet... in fact, I have a lot of part 3 to write up still, but my brain's not cooperating with me! Woeness!
MrsMosley: Weee! Glad to have you hooked! Not sure when the next part is coming out, but I think I'd better pace myself before I post too fast too soon and yall are forced to wait weeks (ormonths...) for the next bits!
The Little Tornado: Glue? You mean, I'm gonna have to put them back together? Drat! (Just kidding! I plan on putting them back together, but several people are going to be missing pieces or have them rearranged...) I'm glad to see you're hooked, and hopefully you won't be afraid for too long. (Or should that be 'you WILL be afraid?' Hmmmm!)
eminMN: No worries on the length of fdk, I just love to know that people are reading. And I know what you mean about the over exposure of celebrities and such! Almost makes me wish for illiteracy, but then I remember I wouldn't be able to write, either...
jojo_da_crow: Sorry about the confusion in the time jumps. I'll have to sit down and figure out how to make it less confusing if it gets to be too confusing. And yes! Another one hooked! Wahoo!
carolm: Aww! But I loved the fdk. Size doesn't matter, you know
Awww, I hope your days have gotten better, though
BJ: Yeah, Tempus is real evil. Not sure that he'll be making much more of an appearance, though.
Eek! Looks as though I was slightly unclear on one thing: After the explosion of the time machine, Lois had lost her memories for three weeks. So, those first three weeks in the alt alt Metropolis are a blank to her. Will she get those memories back? I have no idear!
I'm glad everyone seems to be enjoying so far, and hopefully I won't have to make yall wait too long between parts! ^_^