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Ahhhhh... feedback. My favorite holiday gift. It's inexpensive, it's easy to give and I wouldn't exchange it for anything.

I'm not trying to kill or torture you guys! Well, not much. I'm just enjoying the suspense. I recently rewatched "Wall of Sound" and I was all giggly and happy through the whole episode. It starts with this fun little flirty scene between Lois and Clark where she asks him to be her date for the Kerth Awards and it just gets better from there. It's the last scene of that episode that was part of the inspiration for this series. It's one of the few times in the series where Lois and Superman interact in such a way that you could practically feel the sexual tension coming off of them in waves. And yet, for all of that, it had a really comfortable "friends" feeling to it. How did they get to that point when, as Jojo pointed out, we rarely saw the Lois/Superman dynamic go beyond a rescue and a few longing looks? That's all I'm trying to accomplish with this series (besides dragging out the unresolved sexual tension).

Jojo, I'm especially delighted that you're enjoying this so much because after "Proof" you said: When I decided to extend the story I took into account what you said. So, hopefully, the others in the series have ended with that same "what happens next" feel to them. And Ann, I told you in that same email that it was going to be a five-part series and that the fifth one would have an nfic version. The end is in sight.

Sheila asked: Lois doesn't realize (yet) that Superman is in love with her - that would require her to connect the dots and see who he really is. What she knows/senses/feels is that he's obviously attracted to her and he keeps coming around and isn't completely dodging personal questions about himself. So he must, on some level, want to tell her his secret. Until then she's hoping to wait out his infatuation with the "moron" and then maybe he'll turn to her for more of the friendship that they've built.

I'm glad you all liked the "moron" line - it cracked me up when I wrote it.

Thanks so much for the comments. I really do appreciate every little word you guys give me!

Good series. Frustrating, sort of, but tantalizing. Looking forward to the next part or two

PJ

Great series. I just love the romantic tension. You really do have a great way of writing every feeling in a way that allows the readers to experience it. Very well done. I hope there is another in the making . . . . ???

Rhea

Thank you Sue!

-- MR

Well normally I would have stuck with my first thoughts on this... but you really did pull this off. You were able to do it with out it being forced and relying on the first story to carry you through the sequels. To many times authors try to recreate the magic and just end up ruining it. You did a fine job of making it fresh and keeping us on the edge of our seat. So yes Ma'am, I am enjoying it.

You know, Sue, I sometimes feel I shouldn't be hanging around these boards at all, seeig as how I'm not really a "Lois and Clark" fan, but a much more general "Superman and Lois" fan. (But honestly, if I don't hang around here, where else could I go?)

Anyway. I grew up with a Superman who thought of himself as Superman. (No: I honestly don't think he thought of himself as Kal-El.) Clark Kent was just a silly disguise that he used because... because... well, I once read a story that explained to me that Superman needed a break from his Superman duties sometimes, he needed some down time pure and simple, and his Clark Kent identity provided him with that. But he most certainly didn't think of himself as Clark Kent, because Clark Kent was not a real person.

But Superman was in love with Lois Lane. Or at least, when I was barely fourteen years old I became convinced that he was in love with her. Later I was not so sure. Superman had a very cool, extremely PG - correction, an extremely G-rated - relationship with Lois. Put it like this: Whatever he did with her, he didn't mind if anyone saw him doing it. So when he dated her - as Superman, of course - he happily did it in public, splendidly dressed in his red and blue suit. Lois was waiting for him on a busy street of Metropolis, and he came swooping down from the sky, literally sweeping her off her feet as he carried her off to their date. So what did they do on their date? Why, he took her to a really lovely restaurant, of course, where they had a candle light dinner as the other restaurant guests looked on. Did he kiss her? Come on. This is Superman. What would the children say if they saw their hero kiss Lois? I remember another story, a Valentine story, where Superman was sitting next to Lois on her couch, looking rather relaxed. He had his arm around her, but he wasn't kissing her, oh no, and then he explained to her that they could never have a real relationship unless she became invulnerable so that his enemies couldn't hurt her. Well, sigh. And after he had said that he took off, promising Lois to search for a way to make her invulnerable. Yeah. Fat chance of that.

Ah, but... there really were times when Lois seemed to move him. Where he seemed to want her. Of course, the basic premise was, and remained, the idea that Lois couldn't be with Superman unless she was super. And since she wasn't, she couldn't be with him. This idea was taken to its logical conclusion in the movie Superman II, where Superman became non-super for Lois's sake, but she couldn't become super for him. When he had to become super again he had to leave her, and so, inexorably, they went their separate ways. And I gave up on Superman.

Later, when Superman was re-invented as a guy who was really Clark Kent, who just used his Superman identiy as a disguise to make it possible for him to have a life, it suddenly became possible for him to court Lois Lane for real. You bet I was ecstatic, but a tiny part of me somewhere was disappointed. What about Superman? You know, the guy who really was Superman? Would he never be able to be with Lois?

Sue, your story does just this for me - it makes it possible for Superman, my childhood hero, to have a relationship with Lois. I really think that your Superman is the man I thought I saw and fell in love with when I was barely fourteen years old. The Superman who really, seriously loves and wants Lois. The Superman who is vulnerable because of his love for Lois. The Superman who spends so much time longing, dreaming, wanting, orbiting... (which is why he seems to be hanging around outside Lois's window all the time....)

Did I tell you before that I didn't like your story, Sue? Did I? If I did, forget whatever I said. You have given me my childhood hero in this story. Granted, he is a little more... well... a little more, uh, inappropriately dressed than I could ever imagine him being when I was fourteen. At least he was that in part one of this "Proof" series. Well, I'm so far from being fourteen these days, and I'm so far from wanting him to be modestly dressed in his super-suit all the time.

I guess I can only say that Queen Sue strikes again. If only Siegel and Shuster could see their hero now. If only the guardians of the innocence of children of the fifties and sixties could see him. A few days ago I watched the movie Pleasantville, where the parents of the teenagers not only do not recognize the word "sex", but also they are completely unfamiliar with the activity itself. (You have to wonder how they managed to become parents in the first place.) Ah, well. In Pleasantville, people go from being black and white to glowing in glorious technicolor when they are introduced to various forbidden fruits. When I was a kid, Superman really was in black and white, at least in the comic books here in Sweden. Queeen Sue is seducing him, making him blush like a rose. We know that the suit partly comes off, that has been proved without a doubt by what we have already seen of your story. Now I, at least, am waiting for my hero to "know" Lois, in the Biblical sense of the word.

Love your story, Sue.

Ann

*disbelieving snort*

But I loved it anyway.

And despite all she said, I still think she's gonna kill him.

Next part, please!

Hi Sue,

Tell you what I really think?? I didn't read any of the other comments yet so I could just tell you what I think rather than be influenced by others' remarks. I think you exposed how Clark is going to reveal himself:

I. can't. wait! This part has the same electric banter going between our heros. Mmmm, so good!
I LOVE your writing skills...

Now, write on!
Anne

I just told you this in an email, Sue. No reason why I can't repeat it here.

Ann

Just where is part 4 Sue? I beta'd it. I remember doing it. It was so good. I haven't seen a newer version grace my inbox and I haven't seen you post it yet.

And part 5! I haven't seen it grace my inbox yet... Yes, I know you've sent me snippets of that wonderful new story you're working on (DJ greedily refuses to share any snippets with anyone ) but that's no excuse.

So, come on, tell me, what's the hold up? And don't you dare blame 50 First - I don't want any mobs coming to my house.

<DJ hastily backs out of the thread before Sue can catch her>

I second that!

Although, if the Ny*Quil discussion down in the OT threads is any indication, I have an inkling about what's happened to it at the moment.

SUE!!!!

You're an evil

Keep it up and i'll look forward to more... Now where's the call button for that nurse?? I think my IV needs to be changed!!!!

Mary

Yes, please, please, please, Sue. Please post soon. Pretty please?

Ann

P.S. With sugar on top?

DJ, I think you're misleading these good people. I had a snippet of part four that I sent to you. And that's still all I have. I'm between meetings right now and hiding deep within a cubicle maze with the hope of actually getting twenty minutes to jot down the feverish thoughts circling in my mind.

Maybe by the weekend? I'm just happy to know that someone - besides DJ - remembers the story.

Thanks guys!

Oh, we remembered it. We were hoping by with holding more FDK that we'd *encourage* you to continue it. Please do continue it. It has emotional torture, we like torture right now, don't we? Yes, preciousssss.

Anyway.

Sue, that NyQuil really has gone to your head. What an insane comment!

<DJ rolls eyes> Snippet schmippet. I wish my "snippets" were that well developed.

<DJ rolls eyes again> As if!


Now DJ is leaving this thread before she gets dizzy from too much eye-rolling.

-- MR

Hmmm. There's something I need to remember. Who? So? Sue? Cindy-Lou Who?

Part four! That's it. Part four of... part four of...

There's something I've got to remember. Re-member. Re-Member. Member. Re. That's it. I've got to member Re... Who's Re? Who? Sue?

No Proof. I'm scared. Do I Dare?



Lady in white coat... Pretty smile... Who? Sue? Lou? What's that needle doing in my arm? Member...Re...Proof... member...Re...Dare....

Not sure who I am, but I'm....

*squeals and DIES*

...

...what you want a review? YOU KILLED ME!

seriously, who needs porn when this is way more hot?

wowowowowowowow.

That was so hot. Again, I enjoyed the questions going back and forth.

To Clark:
Geesh! Just tell her that Lex tried to hurt you! She would believe you as Superman at the moment. Now just tell her. I know it's like having a horrible sticky bandaid on your leg and it has to come off, but it's not healed all the way and it will really hurt. Well, it's not like you have ever experienced that, but I'm sure you've heard of this. Just pull it off, face the wrath and get kisses later.

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I wonder what he was going to say?