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Heaven's! Great description of Tempus. I'm still speechless. He's so **E V I L** This was really angsty. I'm shivering. And did I mention? 
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Good Valar! Short, and extremely intense. I can see it all like it's right before me, and the fact that you cut it right there...right before...IT happens, is all the more powerful. Very effective. Amazing writing. I think I'm going to go curl up and read some FLUFF piece now... <sneaks off> SmirkyRaven ---------------------------------------- I love anything that ties my heart in a knot. Bring on the love and the pain. 
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Very nice, as usual. But angsty though it is, I am left with hope: there is no reason to assume that Tempus will succeed in shooting Lois when so many others have failed.
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But angsty though it is, I am left with hope: there is no reason to assume that Tempus will succeed in shooting Lois when so many others have failed. Yeah, you did that deliberately, didn't you, C_A.  I, too, harbour the hope that Superman came back to save the day before it was too late. How long does it take to douse a few flames anyway? <g> This was wonderfully atmospheric and well written. I love it. LabRat 
Athos: If you'd told us what you were doing, we might have been able to plan this properly.
Aramis: Yes, sorry.
Athos: No, no, by all means, let's keep things suicidal.
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I, too, harbour the hope that Superman came back to save the day before it was too late. Forget Superman, I think Lois could take out Tempus herself!
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Didn't Tempus have a gun in Tempus Fugitive?
Either way Tempus probably forgot one teensy weensy thing; Lois knows Tae Kwando very well. Tempus will get cocky thinking about irony, Lois will kick the gun away, giving her enough time to either get the gun or call for Superman, and Tempus is defeated again.
Nevertheless, very well written.
I think, therefore, I get bananas.
When in doubt, think about time travel conundrums. You'll confuse yourself so you can forget what you were in doubt about.
What's the difference between ignorance, apathy, and ambivalence?
I don't know and I don't care one way or the other.
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I am getting to be a big fan of your vignettes. They are so lyrical. I love how well crafted they are. Love the repetition of "Know thy enemy." Love the mention of the sonic boom (a detail I adore from the movie heh). I also like getting in the head of a bad guy. Makes for interesting reading. Just great.
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Two words: Time. Machine. 'Nuff said. Now I'm going to spend the next few hours finding all sorts of ways to fix this in my head. Nicely done - as always. 
Lois: You know, I have a funny feeling that you didn't tell me your biggest secret.
Clark: Well, just to put your little mind at ease, Lois, you're right.
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Brilliant vignette, C_A. So tightly written with so much power behind your choice words! And this? The key to the destruction of Superman did not lie in killing him—rather, it lay in killing what he treasured above all else. It gave me chills. 
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Forget Superman, I think Lois could take out Tempus herself! Well, he does have the element of surprise. OTOH, so did...whatsisname (I really have to brush up on my episodes) in IGYUMS and she took him out pretty fast when he was sneaking around in the house. But...he didn't have a gun... Would depend how big a drop he got on her before she realised he was there, I guess. If she spots him, he's dead meat.  I reckon Woody's right though. Tempus would get too cocky to sneak up on her, or shoot her through a window or whatever, before she had a chance to know he was there. He'd have to announce his presence and gloat for three hours, first. Nah...either Lois or Superman would nail him long before he got around to the actual killing bit, I think.  LabRat (very happy she's sorted that one out in her head <g>)
Athos: If you'd told us what you were doing, we might have been able to plan this properly.
Aramis: Yes, sorry.
Athos: No, no, by all means, let's keep things suicidal.
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Here's another solution:
Tempus pulls the trigger, fires the gun, and shoots Lois...
but the bullet bounces off.
He was unaware that Clark had had Dr. Klein set up something like Dr. Kelly did, and now Lois is invulnerable.
I think, therefore, I get bananas.
When in doubt, think about time travel conundrums. You'll confuse yourself so you can forget what you were in doubt about.
What's the difference between ignorance, apathy, and ambivalence?
I don't know and I don't care one way or the other.
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Glad you guys have it all figured out. Saves me having to write a sequel where Lois whups Tempus' butt ... or, you know... not. Thanks so much for the feedback, everyone. I'm kinda stunned, really, seeing as how I wrote this in about five minutes after the idea popped into my head last night. I really appreciate it. I reckon Woody's right though. Tempus would get too cocky to sneak up on her, or shoot her through a window or whatever, before she had a chance to know he was there. He'd have to announce his presence and gloat for three hours, first. Reminds me of item #6 on the Evil Overlord list: "I will not gloat over my enemies' predicament before killing them." And this... Two words: Time. Machine. ... reminds me of item #41: "Once my power is secure, I will destroy all of those pesky time travel devices." Hmm...  I think it would make for an awesomely funny (in a morbid kind of way) fic if Tempus got his hands on the Evil Overlord list and proceeded to implement it.
Fanfic | MVs Clark: "Lois? She's bossy. She's stuck up, she's rude... I can't stand her."Lana: "The best ones always start that way.""And you already know. Yeah, you already know how this will end." - DeVotchKa
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I think it would make for an awesomely funny (in a morbid kind of way) fic if Tempus got his hands on the Evil Overlord list and proceeded to implement it. Oh...my. Wouldn't it just. So...be posting that one soon, will you? What? Stop grimacing like that. It's a reader's job to give their favourite author more work to do. It's in the contract. LabRat
Athos: If you'd told us what you were doing, we might have been able to plan this properly.
Aramis: Yes, sorry.
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C_A - chilling story. Loved it! Oh and what do you mean that since we've all come up with suitable endings you don't have to write a sequel <me pouts> What? Stop grimacing like that. It's a reader's job to give their favourite author more work to do. It's in the contract. Yeah. You go Labby. These hard-hitting little vignettes are great. We want more  -- MR
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Oh...my. Wouldn't it just. So...be posting that one soon, will you? Ya know, I would, I really would, but I just suck at comedy. I feel at home writing angst and pain and suffering. You should take it up with someone who does humor well, like, say, Mary aka Queen of Capes? (I still crack up thinking about Rescued). Yeah. You go Labby. These hard-hitting little vignettes are great. We want more Aw, thanks, DJ. I'm glad people enjoy reading them as much as I enjoy writing them.
Fanfic | MVs Clark: "Lois? She's bossy. She's stuck up, she's rude... I can't stand her."Lana: "The best ones always start that way.""And you already know. Yeah, you already know how this will end." - DeVotchKa
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He'd have to announce his presence and gloat for three hours, first. LOL! That would indeed be very Tempus.
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Great job - again!! This says it all about your fics: Who is the Evil Overlord?
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Who is the Evil Overlord? It's a joke list on the net. There are many variations. 100 Things I Will Do When I Become An Evil OverLord is the gist of them. Some of them are hilarious. Here's a link to one version: Evil OverLord List You need to scroll down a bit to hit the list. Enjoy. LabRat
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