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Again, all feedback welcome! Even if it does singe...
Betsy Rogers
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No singes from me, Betsy. This was absolutely wonderful! Please do keep writing whenever you can. And congrats on the soon-to-be new arrival  Melisma (wiping a tear away, here under her Rock)  ('cause it touched me so deeply, not 'cause it was bad or sad...)
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Betsy, Wonderful, i am all misty eyed and smiling and look like a dork...god that was just so sweet! And so well done, that is such a good way to explain to a child that they were wanted at all times when they have been adopted... 
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Betsy,
I really should know better than to read fic in a public place, the tears in my eyes are a great big indication of the fact that I'm not working/reading fic. This was wonderful! You managed to capture Jonathan and Martha perfectly, and I loved Jonathan's analogy at the end!
Loriel
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You posted! I have to admit I've been waiting for this one since you sent me that little excerpt, eager to see the entire thing. And I was not disappointed. Superb, Betsy! Beautifully lyrical and poignant and heart-breaking and heart-warming all rolled into one wonderful vignette.  Brava! Eyes watering, Clark jumped up and hugged his dad. Jonathan's big arms wrapped his son in a warm, loving hug. And Clark clung to his father - his real father in every sense that a father could be. Still got a huge lump in my throat from this final paragraph. Good luck with that other little creation you're working up too.  LabRat
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Betsy,
wonderful
what LaBRat said
keep writing
merry
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Awwwww. Betsy, that was great! No singes from me, either. The dog story was inspired -- great way to assure Clark that he was wanted and valued without getting into specifics of the alien/relative's kid stuff.
Good job! And congrats on your soon-to-be-new-arrival. Let us know when the FoLC arrives!
Bethy
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Oh my gosh, Betsy, that was so cute! I love the analogy with the dog! It was so sweet! - Alicia
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Lovely...the dog story was inspired. I like this version of Smallville better than WB's 
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awwwwwwwww... what a sweet story... me got a lump in my throat Meni
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Wow, Betsy. That was... cute and poignant and I had tears in my eyes at the end... what a lovely way to deal with the difficulty. Thanks for posting it PJ
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Very nice Betsy, What a wonderful idea. I hope you continue to write. Laura
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wonderful story, betsy. very beautiful. i really like jonathan's explanation. really well done. i know it's not as important as the other stuff, but i especially like this turn of phrase: Martha could see the layers of 'Stoic Kent' forming on the boy. great job on the whole story. Paul
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This is very nice, Betsy. The bond between father and sun is special indeed and you showed it wonderful with Jonathan and Clark. And the dog story is very cool.
Thanx for posting!
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Betsy This is wonderful. So poignant! And beautifully written! Thanks for sharing this excellent vignette. Tricia 
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Sign me up for the "tears in my eyes at the end" club too.
Beautifully poignant. Kids can be such creeps sometimes, can't they? Clark surely faced many days like this. And Jonathan... ~happy sigh~ That's the Jon Kent from LnC that I absolutely adore. Wonderful characterization!
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Thank you all for the very kind comments  . If you don't hear from me for a while, you'll know why! Betsy
Betsy Rogers
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What? You'll be busy writing something new? :::Hopeful look:::
Yeah yeah, I know, you'll be a busy mommy. But I can still hope that between diapers and feedings and burpings... and whatever else mommies do... you'll be able to write some more.
Melisma (under her Rock, very ignorant about what mommies do, can'tcha tell :p )
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Originally posted by Hazel:
Sign me up for the "tears in my eyes at the end" club too. What she said! Really enjoyed it! Good luck with labor, not to mention the baby. See you back when the baby allows!
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