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#31304 08/04/06 03:00 AM
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oh so cute the Lois and Clark thing. She in denial mode and he didn't let her go. It was so cute when she finally admitted the crush. Thank you, the part was great and I can't wait to read the next one.

I wonder what Lois and Mayson are up to and what happens with Lex.

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I like the story very much, but this part made me take a serious pause in the story to go back an re-read things:

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From my vantage point I see a half-dressed Clark come running towards the stairs to answer my plea. He has on a pair of casual shorts and nothing else. No shirt, not even any socks or shoes.
So, Clark is only wearing a pair of shorts...

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I watch as Clark runs off in search of Superman, and I turn to face Mayson.
Run off to where? Back in the apartment? Out the door? I had visions of Clark leaving the apartment with only a pair of shorts on....

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Keep up the good work.


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#31306 08/04/06 07:12 AM
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Thanks for the fdk Tahu! Glad you're enjoying it.

Jeff - Hmm, well obviously he put some clothes on first. laugh But maybe I should rephrase that to say "I watch as Clark runs to his bedroom, presumably to put on some clothes before he goes off in search of Superman."

Ha ha ha! Thanks for pointing that out and for the fdk. I'll clear that up.

Glad you're enjoying the story. laugh


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#31307 08/05/06 02:02 AM
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I love your story, but darn it all if I wasn't frustrated when Mayson interrupted. razz

This part was absolutely great: thumbsup

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“No, I’m not going to excuse you. Answer the question.” He folds his arms across his chest, causing all kinds of ripples... um, through his chest. I sigh inwardly. Who am I trying to kid? Myself? Those ripples ran straight through *me* causing um... *ripples* of my own.
Rippling ripples.... I love it! clap


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#31308 08/05/06 12:09 PM
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Ha, thanks Classicalla! I'm floored that you're reading both versions. blush

Um, yes, ripples... those are always good. laugh


NOTE: For those of you following the PG version of this story... it will be a couple of days before I post part 4. Look for part 4 on Monday.

Thanks everyone for the feedback!


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#31309 08/05/06 01:51 PM
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how could you do that to us? Till Monday? Are you sure?

Can't wait for part 4. Wanna know what happens with Lois and Mayson and Lex.

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Ha ha! Tahu you're so funny. Go check out the nfic section if you want more... wink


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#31311 08/05/06 02:43 PM
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That's what I did and I gave you a few lines feedback.


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