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FDK: All I Ask - Part 2/5 #280185 05/01/18 09:10 PM
Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 173 Baltimore, Maryland, USA traceylynn OP Hack from Nowheresville
OP traceylynn Hack from Nowheresville Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 173 Baltimore, Maryland, USA	Part 1 can be found here, and Part 2 here. I'd love to hear your thoughts about Part 2! Thank you for reading! Tracey

Re: FDK: All I Ask - Part 2 traceylynn #280187 05/01/18 11:24 PM
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SupesFan Hack from Nowheresville S Joined: Feb 2013 Posts: 152 Southern California	A simple butter knife was all that was needed to cut the sexual tension in Clark’s apartment. I was so heartened to see Lois thinking about Clark’s actions as opposed to Lex’s declarations of love. The old age adage comes to mind; “What we do is more important than what we say....” Go for it Clark! She asked you to kiss her! Please don’t keep this lady waiting. Wednesday night can’t come soon enough for your next posting.

Re: FDK: All I Ask - Part 2 traceylynn #280188 05/01/18 11:34 PM
Joined: Apr 2013 Posts: 1,332 Tulsa, OK Mike M Top Banana
Mike M Top Banana Joined: Apr 2013 Posts: 1,332 Tulsa, OK	Nice continuation of Part 1. Clark had already won Lois over, he just needed to remind her of that fact. As Lois says repeatedly through this chapter, they fit together and it is as simple as that. I like the comparisons of Clark to Lex, probably could use more of them but Lois seems to be coming to the idea that she really isn't thinking much about Lex. I suspect the residual of this date will worm its way into tomorrow's date with Lex as she will not be able to help but to begin actively comparing her two suitors. Oh and no problems about the TOC. Mike Create all the happiness you are able to create. Remove all the misery you are able to remove. Jeremy Bentham

Re: FDK: All I Ask - Part 2 traceylynn #280193 05/02/18 06:20 PM
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CarrieRene Columnist Joined: Jul 2017 Posts: 572 Likes: 12 Southern Pines, NC	Wow. Just kiss her already. I wanted that hug to continue also. In Clark's case its the words and actions that speak louder. He knows what to say and do to win Lois' heart unlike Lex. He listens to Lois and knows her. I can't wait for more.

Re: FDK: All I Ask - Part 2 traceylynn #280194 05/02/18 06:40 PM
Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 2,761 Athina, Hellas A Anna B. the Greek Pulitzer
Anna B. the Greek Pulitzer A Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 2,761 Athina, Hellas	Yes! Those arms, showing just underneath the rolled-up sleeves... so delicious... ahem You know which part I liked best? The one where they are holding hands. It just felt so right! And now, Mr. Kent, just kiss her already!! See ya, AnnaBtG. What we've got here is failure to communicate...

Re: FDK: All I Ask - Part 2 traceylynn #280196 05/02/18 08:11 PM
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jackiek Merriwether J Joined: Dec 2004 Posts: 1,702 Canada	Oh man! Just kiss her! Loved this part. So very sweet. Superman: I hear you've been looking for me. Lois: All my life.

Re: FDK: All I Ask - Part 2 traceylynn #280198 05/02/18 10:19 PM
Joined: Jan 2007 Posts: 1,069 Georgia BJ Top Banana
BJ Top Banana Joined: Jan 2007 Posts: 1,069 Georgia	Yay, new part. Quote She went back into them more than willingly. Her soft sigh flooded against his shoulder, her tears held just barely in check behind her eyelids. He’d known what she was too proud to ask for, fulfilled a need that she was too terrified to voice. Sigh. Quote Should she have noticed? Was that love? And even if it was, would it last? That would be yes, definitely, and yes. I love being inside Lois's head when she's being thoughtful or intuitive. Quote “In my mind, it wouldn’t matter what we did, because we’d be together. I had this vision of walking you home – all the way to your door, even though you’d probably tell me you didn’t need me to – and just before you stepped inside your apartment, I’d reach for you, like this.” He transferred the towel to his other hand and stretched out his right hand, just grazing her cheek. She stilled at his touch, every muscle suddenly frozen at the contact of his skin. “I’d look into your eyes, trying to convey everything I was feeling that I couldn’t put into words. And then, I’d lean down because I couldn’t wait one more second to feel your lips against mine. Our first real kiss,” he whispered, and his eyes flicked down to her mouth. m'kay. That was nice. Really nice. Dare I say, hot? I think I'm feeling the heat of Clark's kitchen way over here. Argh! No! Don't stop there. /me pouts. I hate waiting. Great chapter.

Re: FDK: All I Ask - Part 2 traceylynn #280200 05/03/18 12:16 AM
Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,661 Likes: 10 Somewhere on the East Coast Morgana Pulitzer
Morgana Pulitzer Joined: Apr 2010 Posts: 3,661 Likes: 10 Somewhere on the East Coast	Quote It wasn’t a shocking revelation – perhaps she’d always known it on a purely subconscious level, but it was a wake-up call to acknowledge, even in her own mind, the fact that she needed Clark. He was incredibly special to her. Good Lois is finally seeing the light! Quote More so than even her would-be fiancé? Could she even imagine herself sliding into Lex’s arms like this when she needed comfort or support? Nope, not in a thousand years. Lex is the kind of person who thinks the only way to make things better is to throw money at it. Don't walk, run to Clark and don't look back! Morgana A writer's job is to think of new plots and create characters who stay with you long after the final page has been read. If that mission is accomplished than we have done what we set out to do, which is to entertain and hopefully educate.

Re: FDK: All I Ask - Part 2 traceylynn #280209 05/03/18 11:17 PM
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SJH Features Writer S Joined: Jul 2004 Posts: 776 floor 13	Lovely writing. Lois and Clark here are like two small birds with broken wings "I'm red-eyed, tired and drunk" Teri Hatcher "Fun will now commence" 7of9

Re: FDK: All I Ask - Part 2 SJH #280216 05/04/18 08:30 AM
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Millefeuilles Hack from Nowheresville Joined: Aug 2016 Posts: 179 France	A truly lovely chapter, full of subtlety and very telling details. Please, post soon!

Re: FDK: All I Ask - Part 2 traceylynn #280223 05/04/18 09:45 AM
Joined: Sep 2013 Posts: 106 Likes: 2 Pa dutch country Superjan Hack from Nowheresville
Superjan Hack from Nowheresville Joined: Sep 2013 Posts: 106 Likes: 2 Pa dutch country	Oh my, what to say about this delicious story! All those feelings right below the surface waiting to spill out. Thought maybe there was going to be an accidental reveal when Lois was remembering the two kisses that her and Clark had already shared. Was certain that Clark was going to add " and the kiss at the airport" before he thought through who it was that was kissing Lois! Glad that you didn't go down that path though because it would have felt too soon. Can't wait for part 3 and "The Kiss" !

Re: FDK: All I Ask - Part 2 traceylynn #280232 05/04/18 09:42 PM
Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 173 Baltimore, Maryland, USA traceylynn OP Hack from Nowheresville
OP traceylynn Hack from Nowheresville Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 173 Baltimore, Maryland, USA	Always fun to see more feedback! Thanks, guys! Supesfan, I loved this: Quote A simple butter knife was all that was needed to cut the sexual tension in Clark’s apartment. That's a perfect way to describe it! I so love the waffy, romantic part of their relationship, but there's definitely something to be said for their physical attraction, too! Now, Mike, it's like you've been sneaking around in my computer: Quote I like the comparisons of Clark to Lex, probably could use more of them but Lois seems to be coming to the idea that she really isn't thinking much about Lex. I suspect the residual of this date will worm its way into tomorrow's date with Lex as she will not be able to help but to begin actively comparing her two suitors. But we know there's no comparing the two men; let's hope Lois comes to that same conclusion! Anna, I read this and was rofl-ing: Quote Yes! Those arms, showing just underneath the rolled-up sleeves... so delicious... ahem I mean, you and me both, girl. 20 years later and I still watch for those parts in eps. Something is wrong with me <g>. It was fun to see a similar thread running through the fdk: Quote Wow. Just kiss her already. Quote And now, Mr. Kent, just kiss her already!! Quote Oh man! Just kiss her! Well, if you know any of my stories... He just might. Quote m'kay. That was nice. Really nice. Dare I say, hot? I think I'm feeling the heat of Clark's kitchen way over here. blush Argh! No! Don't stop there. /me pouts. I hate waiting. Thanks for the fdk, BJ! I love that you could feel the heat of Clark's kitchen, lol. I hope the next part keeps up that feeling! Quote Nope, not in a thousand years. Lex is the kind of person who thinks the only way to make things better is to throw money at it. Don't walk, run to Clark and don't look back! So true, Morgana! I think that'll come up again in this story... Quote Lovely writing. Lois and Clark here are like two small birds with broken wings Thank you so much, SJH. I love that comparison - they really are, especially here at the end of S1. Quote A truly lovely chapter, full of subtlety and very telling details. Please, post soon! Thank you, Millefeuilles! I will Quote Oh my, what to say about this delicious story! All those feelings right below the surface waiting to spill out. Thought maybe there was going to be an accidental reveal when Lois was remembering the two kisses that her and Clark had already shared. Was certain that Clark was going to add " and the kiss at the airport" before he thought through who it was that was kissing Lois! Glad that you didn't go down that path though because it would have felt too soon. Can't wait for part 3 and "The Kiss" sloppy ! Thank you for that fdk, Superjan! I like your idea of an accidental revelation as Clark revealed their "other" kiss - maybe you should write that! Revelations were always hard for me to write, so I think I only ever wrote one of them, lol. I'll leave that to the fanfic pros. Hope that you enjoy part 3 and their kiss! You'll have to let me know if I hit the mark. Thank you all for taking the time to leave feedback. It's so much fun to read your reactions! Part 3 is coming up soon. Tracey

Re: FDK: All I Ask - Part 2 traceylynn #280236 05/05/18 01:42 PM
Joined: Jun 2011 Posts: 2,131 California Mouserocks Kerth
Mouserocks Kerth Joined: Jun 2011 Posts: 2,131 California	Woo-hoo! Plant one on her, Clark! This was a great part-- the lengths Clark went to in order to make this the perfect date, the slow realizations of Lois... I'd leave more feedback, but I have a third part to read. Brava! Nothing spoils a good story like the arrival of an eye witness. --Mark Twain

Re: FDK: All I Ask - Part 2 traceylynn #280237 05/05/18 01:57 PM
Joined: Jun 2011 Posts: 2,131 California Mouserocks Kerth
Mouserocks Kerth Joined: Jun 2011 Posts: 2,131 California	Whoops, bad internet. Ignore second thread. Last edited by Mouserocks; 05/05/18 01:59 PM. Nothing spoils a good story like the arrival of an eye witness. --Mark Twain

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