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That was one intense part. I loved seeing both of them battling with their emotions. I had a hard time, though, picturing Clark so devastated that not even Lois could comfort him (at least given the context) But, above all, a great part, and mostly, a great story. I hope it at least has an epilogue...
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Hi, Great part.
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Great part, great story. I too hope there will be an epilogue.
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Thank you guys so much for reading, and for your comments. I appreciate all the feedback I've gotten on this story. I know the ending's lack of closure is probably frustrating to a lot of readers, but it's a necessary evil, as the title of the piece implies.
I just hope I haven't hurt anyone's expectations by not exactly putting my toys back together just yet. I wanted to give a definite feeling of hope to Lois and Clark here at the end, but still leave them both hurt and hesitant. I'm mapping out a multi-part sequel to "Terms of Estrangement" in my brain, so I hope you can bear with me!
~ Crystal
"Not all those who wander are lost." — JRR Tolkien
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I planned to complain that this story wasn't finished yet, but then I read that you're plannung on writing a MULTI-part sequel, so I'll settle with gushing. This was fantastic. Very intense and emotional. And I really really wish Clark would've talked to Lois instead of sending her home. But I suppose, you will take care of that in that sequel, right? ~Julia
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Excellent conclusion to this, even if you don't write another part. I tend to enjoy stories where the reader can impart their own form of ending (I choose to believe they end up together) but even the show had to take a few years for that to happen, so it's OK that they didn't just fall into each other's arms. I love Lois' determination and Clark's heartbreak at not being able to 'fix' everyone. Beautiful story...good job!
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I enjoy your writing style very much. Great job!
I like the 'ending'. I think something like this takes a long time to get past - these kinds of feelings - this kind of pain.
I will enjoy reading additional installments!
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i was on the edge of my seat ( almost fell off ) lol but good part hope for part two
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Such intense feelings involved here. This was a great story and emotions were so well written. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it and hope to get more from you soon.
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Nice job, very sad but hopeful. Laura
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What a place to end! Very intense, so emotional...I'm waiting for the sequel! Susan
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Yay, a sequel is coming, a sequel is coming! This story was killer. JD
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Your story has been very beautiful, and the ending is certainly hopeful, as I said I wanted it to be in my previous comment. The ending fits the story and definitely the title. It is sad to see Clark push Lois away because he isn't good company, however, because that is really when I think he needs her most. Similarly, that's when I'd most love to see Lois reach out to him. But sometimes we turn each other away at precisely those moments when we are most needy and vulnerable, don't we? And you are planning a multi-part sequel! Now that sounds great indeed! Ann
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This is beautifully written. The ending, even though it is sad and emotional, I look forward to reading the follow-up stories. Tricia
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And while you're mapping out that sequel, don't forget to think about submitting this one to the Archive and Annesplace LabRat
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Just have to say ditto everyone else here - such a poignant and sad final section. So congratulations on finishing this, and hurry up and get that sequel written! Wendy
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That was so, so nice!! Angelic_editor, you did a great job!! And... a multi-part sequel!! Woo-hoo!! I can't wait!! See ya, AnnaBtG.
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Superb! Looking fwd to the sequel...
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I hope I don't sound like the proverbial broken record here when I thank you guys so much for all your incredible feedback! *crosses fingers* Seriously, without everyone's encouragement, I would've left this as a vignette and not written its four other installments. I can't thank you all enough, and to see writers that I have so much respect for commenting on my work has been mind-blowing! I'm honestly just so amazed and humbled at the reception my first-ever fic has gotten; I just hope the planned sequel doesn't disappoint! Thank you all for your kind words, especially in regard to my writing style and characterizations. For me, while the words come fairly easily, the hardest part is trying to get myself in Clark and Lois' psyches to write the heart-wrenching emotional stuff. You've all been so kind -- Wendy, Ann, Anna, Tricia, Shadow, Laura, Susan, Sheila, TVnerd, Maria, Julia, Jackie, Cristina, L, Lovesuper, AnKS, Terry, Chriscy -- just absolutely everyone who's commented! You guys have given me a reason to keep writing, and again, I'm just so grateful. Some of you have picked up on things I didn't even consciously realize when I was writing this, like Ann's observation about just how significant my choice to have Lois watch Woman of the Year was (it's one of my favorite films; Tess Harding reminds me a lot of Lois, but I hadn't even thought about the whole Tracy/Hepburn parallel), and Terry's praise at Lois hating people see her as only a reporter, not a human being. (I'm a journalism student at the University of Kentucky, and one of the editors at the independent daily student-run newspaper, so that was actually my own frustration being vented -- but it works even better for Lois!) Eep, am afraid I've begun to babble, and for that, I apologize. I just wanted to thank everyone for reading and for all the encouragement you've knowingly or unknowingly given! It's much, much appreciated, especially to such a newbie.
~ Crystal
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