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At last! For all those who sent PM's asking me when this would be finished, this part is for you! I am really hoping this meets with folk's expectations. I will now take this opportunity to await your comments.  Many thanks to KatherineKent for betaing and MikeM for helping out.
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Loveliness   ! I really enjoyed this--and yes, it was definitely worth the wait  . Some of my favorite lines: She remembered with a mental grimace that Lana was also quite capable in the kitchen – apparently it was a talent people born in Kansas had to excel at before being allowed to leave the state.  Awesome! Ironically, I do have a cousin that lives in Kansas--and she is absolutely impressive in the kitchen. I have about as much skill in the cooking department as Lois...must not be required in Iowa  . "Besides, isn’t that what people do in Smallville? Get married to their high school sweeties, settle down to a tight little marriage and have two point five children?” Shaking her head in disbelief she rattled on. “Urgh! No, this is Kansas … three children or four, not the nation’s norm of two point five!” This was great. Perfect Lois-Babble  . "As a matter of fact, he was the one who kept telling me to let Lana sort out her own dates for big events and if she needed furniture moved to ask the building superintendent.”
Lois couldn’t help but chuckle in amusement, “See! He knows who’s good for you and who is not!”
He took a thoughtful sip of coffee before replying. “Pete says he’s never seen me happier than when I talk about you. He wanted to know why you and I are not in a serious relationship.”
A look of puzzlement marched across her face, “Why did he say that?”
Despite the seriousness of the conversation he said with a grin.
“Because the name Lois Lane, whether playing poker with the guys or shooting hoops, always seems to crop up in my conversation. He is not the only one who notices. My parents think you are simply the best thing that ever happened to me.” Awww . Loved this. What a great way to sorta talk about being together prior to it happening. So sweet  . Lois studied the delicate features she had come to know nearly as intimately as her own. How could this man’s eyes be so warm, so trusting and innocent one minute and filled with deepest longing at the next? Gradually, as if she were jumping off a high ledge into the sky her head tilted up and their lips met. His lips were soft and inviting, sweet and sensuous, they parted and his tongue touched hers, tasting like the delicate herbal notes of coffee and desire. Clark moved his hands around her waist to further enjoy their embrace. They did not dance in the air as they had done last night, no, only their senses pirouetted and dived as they touched and explored this fresh and tenuously precious new element of their relationship.
For them this was better than any dream or even the dance they shared in the newsroom. Because now nothing and no one stood in the way of their own future, bright with promise and the years untold to come. WAFFiness galore--perfect!  . What a romantic way to end. I'm floating on cloud nine. Great job, Morgana Laura
"Where's Clark?" "Right here."
...two simple sentences--with so much meaning.
~Lois and Clark in 'House of Luthor'~
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Finally got it posted!!
I love the additions you made since I last read it. They made it a more complete piece.
I loved the "Clark Jerome Kent!!!" part and the bantering back and forth regarding his dropping his 'friend' duties. The explanation of why he came to her as Superman instead of Clark was a nice fill in from the previous chapter. Historically he has had that problem and I liked Lois calling him out on that.
As usual your detail description of everything puts us right in Clark's apartment with L&C. Outstanding work as usual.
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An attempt to show the coffee cup Morgana was describing in the story. [img] https://mikemattix.smugmug.com/Misc/n-Kf6Hrv/i-H72jGqr/A[/img] Hopefully you will be able to see it. Mike
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I loved everything about this conclusion of your amazing story and this was most definitely worth the wait. I especially enjoyed the lead up to their dance! I was patiently waiting for Lois and Clark to dance as themselves and it was so perfect, along with a promise of them embarking on a new beginning in their evolving relationship  This was wonderfully written and I hope to read more of your stuff real soon. I just love your Lois and Clark stories, they make me want to dust off my dvds and rewatch this show all over again for the umpteenth time
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She remembered with a mental grimace that Lana was also quite capable in the kitchen – apparently it was a talent people born in Kansas had to excel at before being allowed to leave the state.
rotflol Awesome! Ironically, I do have a cousin that lives in Kansas--and she is absolutely impressive in the kitchen. I have about as much skill in the cooking department as Lois...must not be required in Iowa wink. Thank you so much! Writing this story was fun, I wanted the final part to tug at the heart strings and hit the funny bone! So nice to know you agree.
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MikeMI loved the "Clark Jerome Kent!!!" part and the bantering back and forth regarding his dropping his 'friend' duties. The explanation of why he came to her as Superman instead of Clark was a nice fill in from the previous chapter. Historically he has had that problem and I liked Lois calling him out on that. Hi There!  A number of FoLC's told me this was their favorite line from Part 2! Lois was rather peeved at Clark for getting involved with Lana and now she thinks her rival is in the apartment with him? Our favorite lady reporter is seeing crimson! LOL! It never set well with me that Clark would romance Lois in his alter ego and then be just a friend as Clark. In this story she gets to put him on the 'hot seat'. Again, thank you so much for posting the cup!
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iheartShulesI especially enjoyed the lead up to their dance! I was patiently waiting for Lois and Clark to dance as themselves and it was so perfect, along with a promise of them embarking on a new beginning in their evolving relationship Stacy! That's exactly the way I wanted this to go. These two are about to start the dance of life and marriage. Thanks so much for reading and commenting, I know your schedule is a heavy one!
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And now Lois knows the truth, and she accepts Clark/Superman for who he is. He glanced uncomfortably at a small wooden box on the book shelf. It contained the globe which had acted as a guidance system for the tiny ship that brought him to Earth and taught him about Kryptonian culture and history. But this morning was not the time to bombard Lois with even more information about his heritage. There would be time enough in the future to explain about marriage customs among Kryptonian nobility. Hesitantly he said, “Yes. But it doesn’t matter, Krypton no longer exists.” Hmm ... do I sense a sequel in the works here?
"Oh, you can’t help that," said the Cat: "we’re all mad here. I’m mad. You’re mad."
"How do you know I’m mad?" said Alice.
"You must be," said the Cat, "or you wouldn’t have come here.”
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I really loved that you used dances as the pivotal moments in this fic--Lois’ dance with Superman, the dream dance, and L&C’s dance. I agree with iheartshules that it was so great to kick-off them embarking on the dance of life via a literal dance. As I said before, I really love that Superman wasn’t even in the dream sequence, but I wish you’d done something where this springboards Lois into recognizing her subconscious feelings vs. her jumping straight to saying she was in love with Clark--e.g., you say that it was “Something she had hidden from for too long,” but don’t show her rationale for coming to to that realization. I think the dream sequence is a really neat opportunity for Lois to step back and re-evaluate, and you say that it does that (“The dream had in an odd way brought clarity to her mind”); all the pieces you have there are great--Lana being in town and Clark being absent, the dance with Superman, and the dream--but I felt like the putting them together process was missing. I also thought it was perfectly in character to have Lois begin her complaint with how Clark’s absence had affected everyone else. Love how this showcases her relationship/intimacy issues! Some lines seemed a little unrealistic--e.g., “Oh Clark! I don’t care about fiddles, violins or any of that, just let me be in the orchestra of your life!” Maybe I’m too cynical, but that really jarred me out of the story, especially since Lois is supposed to be crying. Overall, a super fun plot! And par usual, some of your beats are really great; e.g., I absolutely loved “The toe tapping of her expensive shoes reached his ears, telegraphing her mounting displeasure.” Such a great combo of details and well-chosen verbs!
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Clark.
It was time to see Clark. Yes!!! She had indeed lost her best friend! They say you don't know what you have until it's gone. Luckily for Lois, Clark was not really gone. “Lois? What on Earth are you doing here? It’s 4:00AM!”
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“What are you talking about? Lana isn’t here. I dropped her off at her place after the party. But we were on the phone or at least we were until I heard my door being pounded off its hinges. And Lana was calling him at 4:00AM to convince him to leave town with her?  Talk about insistent. The dinner party had been a success; he managed to cultivate a valuable source on the mayor’s staff. While Lana worked the room, garnering contacts, especially with a certain Swiss business mogul – a Mr. Gregory Daae - and smiling happily whenever anyone said she and Clark made a ‘lovely couple’. And there's Gregory Daae, but it seems this is not the same universe, as Clark and Lana are not a couple. “She’s a very important part of my life and her initials are LL.” That's a wide range. It's seems most people in Clark's life have the initials LL. Lois Lane, Lana Lang, Lori Lemaris, Lucy Lane, Lex Luthor, Lionel Luthor, Lena Luthor, Laura Lang, Lewis Lang, Lyla Lerrol and on and on... ![[Linked Image]](http://vignette4.wikia.nocookie.net/superman/images/0/0c/LLinitials-superman157.jpg) yes, he is. And that's why you always find a way to write him in the story, right? As a matter of fact, he was the one who kept telling me to let Lana sort out her own dates for big events and if she needed furniture moved to ask the building superintendent.” Hehe... Pete is a smart guy!  “Yes,” Lois sighed, put down the cup and began picking at a stray thread on the couch. “Until this very moment, I had no idea the depths of my jealousy.” Such a brilliant reporter and she was the only one oblivious to her true feelings. ![[Linked Image]](http://www.freesmileys.org/smileys/smiley-rolleyes008.gif) At the thought of escorting both women a tiny shiver went down his spine. Better to face the Nightfall asteroid again! That is a scary thought even for Superman! “Wait, are you trying to say you are ‘royalty’?” Oh, yes, he is a true prince! Your very noble prince charming. ![[Linked Image]](http://orig09.deviantart.net/177d/f/2012/365/1/c/charge__by_jiorjiina-d5ps484.gif) “Oh Clark! I don’t care about fiddles, violins or any of that, just let me be in the orchestra of your life! Careful, Lois. All that mushyness is going to ruin Mad Dog Lane's reputation. ![[Linked Image]](http://www.sherv.net/cm/emo/laughing/laughing-dog-smiley-emoticon.gif) For them this was better than any dream or even the dance they shared in the newsroom. Because now nothing and no one stood in the way of their own future, bright with promise and the years untold to come. And they lived happily ever after. The end. <happy sigh> ![[Linked Image]](http://emoticoner.com/files/emoticons/smileys/good-sigh2-smiley.gif) A feel-good-story makes any day better. Thank you! Andreia
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Hi Morgana! She needed a man who could publicly deal with supermarkets, not super villains.  Plus, can you imagine Superman standing in line at the cash register? On the plus side, Lois would have all the other cash registers wide open to her. Provided she found an employee manning them. If that were the case, how could he be truly intimate with whoever became his wife? LEX:  I have never had issues achieving intimacy with a woman. And that left Clark. But not as some second-rate ‘consolation prize’, but as the ‘victor’, the only one who fulfilled all her needs, hopes and yes - dreams. Uh-huh. Both other contestants struck out so… LOIS: Did you not listen?  “Oh I don’t know, maybe find out how great the evening went at the Metropolis Museum since you and Lana decided to bring the ‘party’ here! All right Lang! Come out and show yourself!” Jealous Lois is fun! Maybe a tad inappropriate, but fun! “Wait a second. Since when does a movie about fictional star-crossed lovers have anything to do with Lana and I?”
In a superior tone Lois responded. “Ha! You think you’re so smart all the time correcting my copy. For your information, the proper grammatical phase should be Lana and me!” She remembered with a mental grimace that Lana was also quite capable in the kitchen – apparently it was a talent people born in Kansas had to excel at before being allowed to leave the state. A talent she had never expected to master. There there… ![[Linked Image]](http://cosgan.de/images/smilie/traurig/k055.gif) We do know that you’re also quite…good in the kitchen. ![[Linked Image]](http://cosgan.de/images/midi/frech/e045.gif) Jack, Eduardo, Stacy even Cat showed up - wearing a pink jumpsuit and heels – but at least she was there! Let me say, driving that heavy truck on a Saturday afternoon across midtown traffic was not easy!” Right. Lois Lane did not enjoy being in the stronger car. Jack had let him go begrudgingly, but throughout the evening Clark had felt remorse about not helping, after all he was the one who pushed Jack to get his high school diploma. JACK: What? My man was scoring with a hot chick. Why would I begrudge him that? “Lois, there was another person who was very deeply affected by the time I spent with Lana.”
“Really? Who?”
“She’s a very important part of my life and her initials are LL.” Lori Lemaris? The new lead scientist at the Metropolis Ocean Center? A smirk came to Lois lips, “He is cute! But as far as I’m concerned, Alan Rickman as Hans Gruber is totally sexy, especially with that accent!” One has to admit, Lois does have a thing for murderous sociopaths. “Lois, honey, you’ll never have to play second fiddle to Lana or Superman.”
“Oh Clark! I don’t care about fiddles, violins or any of that, just let me be in the orchestra of your life!” So, Clark just promised her that she’d always be his primary concubine while Lois assured him that she’d be happy, just being among his professional caregivers? I finally got around to FDK What an adorable ending! Michael
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A sweet story, Morgana, rife with details and background information as all your stories are! I'm so glad that Clark and Lois got their happy ending -- it appears jealousy really is the way to Lois's heart! I was very impressed at Clark for being brave enough to put it all on the line and tell Lois everything, but I find myself somewhat glad she didn't verbalize that, now that she knew he was Superman, she was willing to believe bad things about Lex. Talk about a confidence killer for Clark! Dance scenes are hard to write well in stories since they're so visual, but I could see Lois dancing with both Superman and Clark. Also, who knew Superman could sing? Very sweet!
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UltraWomanAnd there's Gregory Daae, but it seems this is not the same universe, as Clark and Lana are not a couple. They are not a couple in this universe. But I thought it might be neat to slowly introduce Mr. Daae to FolC's. And they lived happily ever after. The end. <happy sigh>
A feel-good-story makes any day better. Thank you! Absolutely! The movies I based this story on all make me smile with happiness. The music is also quite delicious. Miss Potter has some sad points, but overall it is a lovely film. Darth MichaelQuote:
“Wait a second. Since when does a movie about fictional star-crossed lovers have anything to do with Lana and I?”
In a superior tone Lois responded. “Ha! You think you’re so smart all the time correcting my copy. For your information, the proper grammatical phase should be Lana and me!”
clap Thank KatherineKent for that line. When she suggested it I agreed immediately! Anti-KryptoniteYes! So glad to hear from you my friend! I was very impressed at Clark for being brave enough to put it all on the line and tell Lois everything, You know, it always bothered me that he took his sweet time telling her the truth! Dance scenes are hard to write well in stories since they're so visual, but I could see Lois dancing with both Superman and Clark. Also, who knew Superman could sing? Dance scenes - unless you are a choreographer - are very hard to write! Thanks for reading!
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