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Ugh!! Pam!!

Things are really getting tight!! Kal's in the hands of some pycho-babble Trask goon, Lois can't find Kal and the rock is still on its way!!!

Great section!!!! I can't wait for more!!

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I was hoping that would be Lois on the phone, and overhearing her voice would kick Kal into action. Alas, no...still stuck in the hypnotherapist's clutches. Kal - Lois needs you! The planet needs you! Get up off the couch! smile Susan


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Hi,

Great part. hyper


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Uhoh. Gwen is getting too close for comfort. And Lois not close enough!

Great so far! laugh


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Absolutely loved the word association. (red sun) (yellow costume girl dancing) smile1


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Always love dream sequences in fics. And nice word association stuff too. smile

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Slowly, he nodded. "Subterfuge, instead of frontal assault."
Smart boy, our Kal. laugh

But what I especially liked about this section was your use of dialogue to convey relationships, attitudes, emotions, etc. Well done!

my only criticism: where's Bill? ? whinging

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The word sequence was pretty funny actually. Good job. Poor Kal! Laura


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Ohh, Gwen is getting closer! frown

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Pam

I'm sorry I haven't commented on every section. I've been so busy with work and dancing. frown

This is excellent. smile1

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I just love this story!

And now I have to share a funny thing as I was glancing over this the first time.

I missed the word green and a few other things the first time and so it totally changed the following...(glossing is soooo dangerous sometimes!!!)

And since I thought that Kal was uncertain at this point, I took the question marks at the end of 'Kal's' responses as normal...


Here is Pam's work as I thought it read.

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"We'll start simply," she said. "And work up to the interesting areas."

"Blue."

"Dog?"

"Cat."

"Sun?"

"Red."

"Sports?"

"Football."

"Dancing?"
By this time I was rolling and then I continued.

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"Girl."

"Wife?"
Just as I was about to read 'Zara', someone called and distracted me. When my eyes wandered back to the screen, I picked up on the first thing my mind recognized, which was 'flying' and eveything was correct at that point.

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"Flying?"

"Ships."

"Tidal wave?"

"Harrington."

"Authority?"

"Obey."
When I read the print out later, I picked up on the things I missed and was totally laughing at myself.

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Interesting how Kal seemed to revert to his autocratic self. It makes me wonder how much he has changed--or how deep that change goes. Darn. I really should have waited until it was done. I don't think I'm up for close calls with Trask when I have to wait between each post. And BTW, hasn't it been forever since part 10 was posted?


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